Great story, good dialog, quirky images, poor spelling.
Much as I loved this little AVN, the spelling really is weak. Was this really spell-checked through google docs?
Weird -> Weird Becuse -> Because and so on, with a lot of consistent mis-spellings and missing apostrophes. They're not even US spellings, so I don't know how a spell checker would miss them.
One thing I wonder... Is the humor noticeable? There are no loud haha moments but there should be sentences that give some mirth and I wonder did they?
Or was I so into my own story I saw ten levels too deep...
Also I wrote this in a happy relaxed none serious mindset, but will it be read like that? Will people read this in the same nature as I wrote it in?
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Great story, good dialog, quirky images, poor spelling.
Much as I loved this little AVN, the spelling really is weak. Was this really spell-checked through google docs?
Weird -> Weird
Becuse -> Because
and so on, with a lot of consistent mis-spellings and missing apostrophes. They're not even US spellings, so I don't know how a spell checker would miss them.
Thank you for taking your time to give me a quick review, I really do appreciate any comment I get.
Regarding spelling, just like my art I am working on it.
Regarding weird, I wonder if I accidentally told google to add it to the word list because shit... it really is misspelled throughout.
You're welcome - they really are great stories, and I do very much appreciate the challenges of translating to a non-native language.
I love how detailed the list of contained kinks is.
Thank you! :D
It is something I think should be prioritized when uploading erotic content.
For transparency though: As I'm not yet confident in my art nor my writing, a clear list of tags is what I lean on to be the main draw.
One thing I wonder... Is the humor noticeable? There are no loud haha moments but there should be sentences that give some mirth and I wonder did they?
Or was I so into my own story I saw ten levels too deep...
Also I wrote this in a happy relaxed none serious mindset, but will it be read like that? Will people read this in the same nature as I wrote it in?