The lack of completed pictures as I go through this wrecks the whole "in the moment" feeling. I could even handle the incomplete and badly drawn pictures of the car and Anwar if it was emphasizing her lack of awareness because she was in pain, however it just keeps going. Also at the point of **Spoiler incoming** "We are home and you're mistake caused me a great deal of agony!" she would have insisted the game was over or the marriage would be, just saying.
The part that let it down the most was the spelling - it really would have been worth putting it through a spell checker. like you've done with others of your games.
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The lack of completed pictures as I go through this wrecks the whole "in the moment" feeling. I could even handle the incomplete and badly drawn pictures of the car and Anwar if it was emphasizing her lack of awareness because she was in pain, however it just keeps going. Also at the point of **Spoiler incoming** "We are home and you're mistake caused me a great deal of agony!" she would have insisted the game was over or the marriage would be, just saying.
This was a lot of fun, for a short linear AVN!
The part that let it down the most was the spelling - it really would have been worth putting it through a spell checker. like you've done with others of your games.
Although they almost look like it, the screenshots are not in chronological order.
I just found it funny how I could make em tell a little story by doing it like that. You know what? I'm even gonna add a key dangling.
Just note then! A key dangling scene does not appear in the novel!